Friday, November 25, 2016

Reflection on a piece


The post I’m writing a reflection on is titled “Confession of a Meat-Lover.” It is one of the earliest blog posts I made this semester when we discussed the theme of “gender and food.” Back then, I wrote mainly in the narrative (and I still do). 

This piece’s introduction could use more work. While it is satisfactorily clear, it is not the clearest it could be. The tie between masculinity and strength, along with raw food, is not a clear cut one and could be improved on with an extra paragraph, perhaps giving history and other sources of evidence that can further clarify the distinction. 

The narrative part is smooth and tells a nice story. More senses could be incorporated. 

The ending seems a little abrupt. It could be elaborated on once again with history and other sources of evidence that can draw out the shape of the passage. Evidence can help clarify the argument and strengthen it. 


Overall, the piece, while smooth and descriptive, lacks a degree of substance or well-developed argument that could help flesh it out. 

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